Site Home Forum Index Everypony Radio Everypony Chat Everypony Blogs
Results 1 to 8 of 8

Fan-Fiction: An Interplanatery Angel and His Ditzy

  1. An Interplanatery Angel and His Ditzy

    7 Comments by FaustVIII8426 Published on 4th Jul 2012 11:42 AM
    The dark violet of the midnight in her room washed over her. She let loose an aggravated groan and shifted her eyes from the photograph, only capable of being made out as an outline. Her blonde mane moved with her as she lifted herself onto her hooves. Pain was welling up inside again, and she searched desperately for the answer inside of herself. Her golden gaze crippled to the floor, and her sorrow was rising. For the last few days, she was nursing this...feeling... she had thought once shoved into the reaches, forgotten. Was it her own fault for the urges? Was it her fault for her heart to feel empty...? No, it couldn't be... She had asked Twilight about this sensation before, but the lavender pony had only offered a scientific explanation. Something about a thing called dopamine and nor-epinephrine. Not a response that was exactly capable of grasping Ditzy's understanding.

    "Doctor...."

    A sensation ran into Ditzy's chest. A pressure, beckoning her to speak to the chestnut stallion from another dimension. A frothing feeling of pleasure thudded in her hammering heart. A smile wriggled it's way upon her lips. She blushed deeply. It's been way too long for this... She had to tell her Doctor. She wanted to...She NEEDED to. She needed to know if he felt the same.
    Thud...Thud....thud....

    She concentrated on her heart. Could she possibly control it? She knew that he could most definitely tell if it were working like a mallet on an anvil. Her slight blush was proof enough that there was a situation, but he was a Doctor, how couldn't he know something was a matter.

    "Ditzy Doo?" Said Doctor, sneaking through her house. Ditzy's eyes widened, and had little time to react. She heard his hoofs clip clop up her staircase, and she jammed the picture back into the pillowcase. She switched on her lantern, which offered a brilliant glow across the room.
    "Y-yes Doctor?" Said Ditzy, eyes shifting, as the time traveler nudged the door open. he had stared at her.

    Thud....Thud...thud...

    She gazed into the Doctor's aquamarine blue eyes. Her haunches radiated much resembling the way that her face was right now. Except that her face, as a matter of
    fact, was able to be noted. It was bright red.

    The Doctor's sudden appearance had been the shower that had put a damper on her resolve. The task at hoof could wait. Couldn't it?
    "Ditzy, what's wrong?" Asked the neatly groomed Doctor, his tone bordering upon concern. He maneuvered himself to get closer to the young mare. The thick veil of light emanating from the lantern hanging from the roof glowed across the room, and as the Doctor happened to stand before Ditzy, gave him a celestial outer lining. His voice during his sentence just moments ago had soothed her. It always had, always would.
    "Y-yeah Doctor...Just...a b-bad muffin. Nothing's wrong."

    "Well, that's peculiar. I guess even an equine can get alil sick. But why is your face so red? it seems...."

    The Doctor shut his lips for the moment as he attempted to discover what was the problem. Ditzy's feelings were growing larger as she took in the site of him. He was so glorious. She couldn't help but tremble as she gazed at him. Those eyes she always loved illuminated the place like search lights in the darkest part of her memory.
    She hadn't lived a life. She had lived a nightmare. Everyone staring with those condescending eyes....her mother leaving her in the Everfree forest with only a bottle of bubbles, a bubble rod, and her favorite doll Miss Sweetie, and her dad dying in the middle of her teenage years. Everything about her thoughts terribly depressed the mare. Life had treated the pony with only misfortune. Until now of course..

    She had the Doctor.

    A caramel stallion, not the biggest, but definitely a fine tuned creature for her sight of perfection. He had a set of eyes that could makes the stars themselves envy their beauty. His body was set with a fine coat, well groomed naturally and soft. His mind was a fantastic array of brilliance, brought about from who knows how many years of experience. Plus, he was so sweet...Her wings lifted in sensual delight. She couldn't control it. And the worst part is, the Doctor had spent hours studying books on Pegasus and Unicorn anatomy in Twilight's library. Each day he academically opened his mind for countless amounts of time. He knew.

    "D-Ditzy.. I...Uhm... I'm s-s...sorry....?"

    She had been found out, she was certain. Ditzy had to force herself. She had known him for about a year by this point, and her love was too garish to ignore. For her and the Doctor both that was true. They had awkward moments before, but never mentioned the feeling she was sure she was feeling.
    She had to show him.

    For a moment she thought she had just crashed all amounts of friendship they had. Her lips pressed to his own in a fit of passion, close to borderline immaculate, which danced wildly about like an inferno as her tongue teased the tip of his own.
    Doubt began to provide it's way inside of her. Did she go to far?
    Before she could even finish that thought, the Doctor, in a completely sincere action, began to trot his own tongue above the gray mare. He...was enjoying this? A supernova of bliss burst inside of her chest.

    "D-Doctor..."

    "My assistant...."

    "I...w-wanted to tell you something for such a long time..."

    "I know..."

    "I love you."

    They both spoke those three words in unison. Both faces were flushed now, and they gazed towards eachother. What should they do with this sensation now?


    -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
    Should I make a part two?

  2. Total Comments 7

    Comments

  3. #2
    Banned
    Join Date
    May 2012
    Gender/Species
    Pegasus (m)
    Posts
    6
    Mentioned
    0 Post(s)
    Kinda short, but good. I would recommend a second part. I didn't really think of a deep relationship between ditzy (derpy) and doctor whooves but I can try something new. I am thinking this takes part after a while of them meeting. Overall it was a good fanfic. Keep up the good work :-D

  4. #3
    Junior Member FaustVIII8426's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2012
    Gender/Species
    Pegasus (m)
    Location
    Florida
    Posts
    10
    Mentioned
    0 Post(s)
    Thanks so much.

  5. #4
    The Dilliest Dilly Star's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2011
    Gender/Species
    Pony (m)
    Cutie Mark

    Dilly Star's Cutie Mark
    Location
    IL, U.S.A.
    Posts
    2,159
    Blog Entries
    11
    Mentioned
    0 Post(s)
    FryDayEveryDay
    ZetaOmicron
    Please do continue to create material on par with this work. This gets a good thumbs-up from me.

  6. #5
    Junior Member FaustVIII8426's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2012
    Gender/Species
    Pegasus (m)
    Location
    Florida
    Posts
    10
    Mentioned
    0 Post(s)
    Most definitely will. Thank you

  7. #6
    Junior Member Jaberous's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2012
    Gender/Species
    Unicorn (m)
    Location
    Canterlot
    Posts
    8
    Mentioned
    0 Post(s)
    Real good, mate. It was cut rather short, however detailed and catching to the reader none-the-less. I have no idea how this would continue as a part two, considering their love for each other has already been proven undeniable, so a part two would be less of a romance and more of a "how life goes on" sort of genre.

  8. #7
    Pony Member MasterZ-Pony's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2012
    Gender/Species
    Pegasus (m)
    Location
    Illinois, USA
    Posts
    15
    Mentioned
    0 Post(s)
    That was worth the read and I hope to see a part two. I agree that there should be a "how life goes on" story line.

  9. #8
    Banned
    Join Date
    Jan 2013
    Gender/Species
    Pony (m)
    Cutie Mark

    GrimDark's Cutie Mark
    Location
    Behind you...
    Posts
    913
    Blog Entries
    8
    Mentioned
    0 Post(s)
    More! More stories! You're fantastic at this kind of writing, keep it up!

Tags for this Thread

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •