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With no more distractions, the younger sister’s eyes strayed up to her elder’s head and the absence of a hat. The guilt was too much to hold back...
aha, well thank you. Sorry, I didn't look up 'retort', so that's my bad for being ignorant of the usage. I'll be changing that right away. Edit:...
could you please point out said grammatical issues? and what parts were most difficult to follow if you don't mind extrapolating?
@Tempest Wind: thank you for the warm welcome. As for waiting til it's done, I'm afraid that might take awhile. I have part of the first chapter...
I've been developing this story sin February and writing infrequently since April. I'm just looking for honest interest to reconstitute my...
Shazzlnet is the handle, but Shaz for short is fine. I'll be honest and to the point. I joined here to post a fanfiction that I'm working on as a...
