Dark Shine tries to rap: #1

So, as the title suggests, I am going to try and rap.
I will try and record my progress here. (See my pun )
In all seriosuness, here is my first verse and the name of the song:

Its over.

This day is going to be perfect,
yeah right I dont understand if its worth it.
So Pinkie Pie Twi Shy and the way more
Put yourhooves in the air, like its full war,
You say that I cant seem to rap?
Well letme tell you what, clapclap!
Because Imay be new to the game,
Does not mean I dont give a damn about that pain!
So before you talk, let me tell you what,
This is the Dark Shine's song
and I dont want nothin of ya!

Please note, due to some change and will sound hopefully better than it looks :derpe:

Please tell me what you think :derpe:
I really need constructive criticism...​