Merry Christmas and a bit of an update on the fan-fic thing!

First of all: Merry Christmas! Everyone having/ had a good day?!
Secondly: The fan-fic! Yes! I have a title for it an have already started! Down below is what I have thus far. CONSTRUCTIVE criticism would be much appreciated! ^^

Spoiler: A case of the apple blues

It was a dark night that night, the veil of moonlight barely visible past the
endless storm of dark clouds, harbingers of the oblivion. Barely a
word, a peep or a whisper broke the silence of the night, the moon
high in the sky, yet shrouded in the storms bedding of cloud.
Ponyville was shrouded in a thick mist, the only sound heard was the
occasional Singing of Crickets, their chirping and rustling in the
leaves breaking the silence in the slightest of ways. The library
loomed out of it, desolate as it had no librarian. The cakes new
buisness, called 'sugar cube corner' just opened a few days before,
its basic and plain bakehouse look standing as odd within the usually
cheery town.
Then, at the very egde of this currently quiet town, was the apple family
farm. Its bleak, red wooden walls held up by its dark, oak wood
frame. A sole, metal bell, rusty and slowly ageing to its end. The
orchards great tree's swaying in the slowly increasing breeze.

So yeah! Merry Christmas Everypony!
(Side note on the fan-fic. It is set before the mane 6 get their cutie mark.)