A nice, sweet story. You really like the word "soft". ;P There's some slight repetition, where you use the same adjective in several sentences in a row. I don't really know what that is in regards to the proper usage, just that it tends to be done rarely.
I tried to roleplay this with my friend at a talent show,another one of our friends was the narrorator,we won!
cute, simple, nice story! not too detailed or long so you get lost, but not way too simple so its boring! riiiight in da middle! great job!
