the little MLP analysis that I did. to be honest I don't like the way I worded some things butt I do at least like the way it came out. I do enjoy doing these.
Here's what I can say about the Video. Good Points: You seem to have a Decent sounding mic which is good at blocking out most background noise. A script was likely used to avoid awkward "Um"s and "Uh"s Bad Points: The Video failed to go into enough details about each subject brought up [Making the video quite short and feeling slightly empty of meaning] Some of the words you said were hard to decipher due to your accent, however this is something that will improve given time to practice. Meh Points [Neither good or bad, depends on where your priorities lie] Graphics are kinda of ugly [Can improve overtime] Failed to do simple audio editing to remove keyboard typing and mouse scrolling/clicking.
thanks although it was less of a script and more of bullet points of things I should go over. that way , it would sound more natural I would like for you to explain how it could be improved Accent !? I am an American! ugly? That kind of hurt seeing how I make each expression unique. and the tail is also changes positions. yeah that kind of bugs me too. Once I listen to it with headphones I could hear the clicking and scrolling in between cuts. something I remembered in my last video but I seen to have forgot in this one.
"I would like for you to explain how it could be improved" Do more Research, show evidence and explain what everything is. This way people who are unfamiliar with the Topic can get a good sense of what's going on. "Accent !? I am an American!" You know, an American accent exist right? Several American Accents exist. "ugly? That kind of hurt seeing how I make each expression unique. and the tail is also changes positions." The drawings look shoddy. The expressions are fine, but would I call it good line art or well drawn, no. Not to mention it was obviously made in paint, most known for five year olds making angry birds.
Does that really discredit my points, the fact stands, the drawings look shoddy as " IF " they were made in paint. Where ever or however they were created doesn't matter. It still looks bad.
well the model isn't going to change anytime soon. I already have about 30 prerenders already. It'ld be a pain to create a whole new design. It's simple by design, to make it more easier to mold. but I assume that's not a proper excuse.
I'm not asking for you to change it, I'm critiquing how it looks. To the eyes and to the public, it looks bad, it looks shoddy. You can be simple while providing a nice well drawn image. All I'm saying is that it's unpleasing to the eye. Remember this is critique, you don't have to change anything. I even said the drawing will get better as your drawing skills improve. "Critique is a part of the business" as they would say.
^ Also, to add to that "It's simple by design, to make it more easier to mold." So you do plan to change it over time in small bits right? That's why you wanted it easier to mold right? "well the model isn't going to change anytime soon." Then why does mold-ability have anything to do with it!
everything on him is movable and can be shaped at will. it wouldn't be a problem to change it if I didn't already have about 30 pre-renders. maybe down the course of my development, I'll restylized the persona
That's all great, don't get me, wrong. But I do still think it looks bad to the eyes [At this point of development] Simple improvements that could be made, is a better color palette for the OC. Maybe look at a color wheel and decide more pleasing colors [Simple recolors aren't that hard] and choose a background that matches up with your OC and The Color Wheel to create a more professional look to the eyes.
MY OC HAS A GREAT COLOR PALETTE!!1!1 actually I noticed that and try to rectify it by giving the stage a gradient tint. I changed the background on different videos.
