~This is a little fanfic i wrote. I was a little stressed out and i thought writing something would help ease it a bit, and it did. ^^ Enjoy. And don't be afraid to give me a little constructive criticism. /)^3^(\ This is written kinda like a play. And i know it's not halloween yet but this is the first thing to pop up in my head. But maybe you can share it with your friends when Halloween comes around ya? ~ It was Hallows Eve in Ponyville, and all the ponies were decorating and picking out costumes for Princess Celestia's Grand Halloween Ball that night. Twilight, Pinkie, Rarity, Rainbow, AJ, and FlutterShy were at Sugarcube corner discussing what they costumes they should pick out for the Grand Halloween Ball. Pinkie Pie: OOH! I WANNA BE SOMETHING SPOOKY! NO WAIT, SOMETHING SILLY! NO WAIT, SOMETHING FORMAL YET SCARY! IS THERE SOMETHING LIKE THAT? FORMAL AND SCARY? SCORMAL? NO! SCARMAL! I DON'T KNOW! WHAT DO YOU THINK?!? Rainbow Dash: Uh..I'm not sure about you guys, but i'm gonna dress up like my life long heroes The WonderBolts! I saw a Wonderbolts costume in one of the shops yesterday! Twlight Sparkle: Thats great Rainbow! I'm just gonna dress up in the dress i wore to the Gala. Just something a little formal. I am gonna spend some time with the princess after all. Rarity: Of course you guys would like to be something so scary and just plain out odd. I'm gonna dress up as a beautiful princess! Princess Rarity at your service! Spike: Princes-I mean Rarity, can i get you anything beautiful one? Rarity: What..huh? Oh, Spike it's you. Do be a dear and fetch me some tea. I'm simply parched. Spike: Yes..oh beautiful one! AppleJack: I'm gonna dress up as the Apple Bandit of Apploosa! I'm the mysterious pony who steals everyones apples in town and lets them rot in the sun for all eyes to see in horror! Oooooh! Fluttershy: Oh my.. Pinkie Pie: But AppleJack, YOU LOVE APPLES! OOH! SO DO I! THEY'RE SO SWEET AND YUMMY! AppleJack: Thats the point! It's something scary! Mwuahaha! Twilight: What are you gonna be Fluttershy? Fluttershy: Well..um..I'm gonna be a beautiful butterfly with big beautiful wings. Rainbow Dash: Really? Why don't you be something scary?!? Fluttershy: Ohh..cuz that would be scary. Rainbow Dash: *groans and face hooves* Thats the point! On Halloween your supposed to be scary! Rarity: It's okay Fluttershy, you can be something beautiful on Halloween. Look at what i'm gonna be. I'm gonna be Princess Rarity! Pinkie Pie: OH! ARE YOU GONNA TRY TO BE PRINCESS RARITY FOR PRINCE BLU- Rarity: AH! *puts hoove to pinkies mouth" DO..NOT..SAY..THAT NAME....EVER!! ~AppleBloom, Scootaloo, and Sweetiebelle walk in~ AppleBloom: Hey guys! Twilight: Oh hey there girls, what are you doing here? AppleBloom: We're here to pick up some candy to take back to our treehouse! Twilight: Oh! Having a little Halloween slumber party at your treehouse? Scootaloo: Pshh! No! We're gonna take some candy to eat for when we go into that old manor in the...EVERFREE FOREST! Rarity: What? Oh no no no girls! That place is old and icky! Rainbow Dash: AND HAUNTED! HA! HA! AppleBloom: *gulp* H-Haunted? Scootaloo: Well duh! Why do you think we're going there tonight? SweetieBelle: Yeah! What did you think we were gonna do? Paint it nice and pretty? AppleBloom: Well..um..Yes. Twilight: Oh no girls. That place it too dangerous for little fillies like you three. Scootaloo: But Twilight! Twilight: No buts! You three are gonna stay in your treehouse and have a nice, safe slumber party. SweetieBelle: But what if we find our cutie marks when we're in there? Twilight: Oh girls, like i've said, your cutie marks will come when the time is right. AppleJack: Oh yes girls. Remember, i didn't have my cutie mark for the longest time! I was the last to get it remember? AppleBloom/Scootaloo/SweetieBelle: Yes AppleJack. SweetieBelle: We remember.. Scootaloo: Alright come on crusaders, let's get back to the treehouse. It's getting dark. All ponies: Bye girls! Fluttershy: Be careful.. Twilight: Oh don't worry Fluttershy. They won't go into that forest if they know what's best for them. ~A few hours later, the ponies were on their way to the Halloween Ball. They had their halloween costumes on and were ready to have a great night. Meanwhile at the Crusadors treehouse..~ Scootaloo: Alright Crusadors, let's get ready to go to the old Manor! AppleBloom: But Scootaloo, Twilight said- Scootaloo: Ugh..who cares what Twilight said AppleBloom? She's such a goodie goodie. We can't just let one pony stop us from finding our cutie marks! SweetieBelle: Scootaloo's right. We need to just go into that manor and explore it! No matter what anypony says! Our cutie marks could show is being brave! Scootaloo: Or fighting off evil ghosts and goblins! Haha! AppleBloom: You guys are right! Let's do this! ~So the Cutie Mark Crusaders were on their way to the Everfree Forest to go to the old abandoned manor. It looked alot less scary during the day. But when night falls upon that manor, some say it is the scariest place in all of Equestria. The girls arrived. It was a big house. Two stories, old broken windows, and the front door was almost torn off. The wind was blowing and the moon was about to be covered with clouds.~ Scootaloo: We're here..Are you girls ready! AppleBloom/ SweetieBelle: Y-Yeenope! Scootaloo: Oh come on girls! We went through half of the Everfree Forest to get here! Now come on! AppleBloom:..Well alright. *gulp* ~*All 3 Crusadors walked up to the creepy old manor, slowly, quietly..without saying a word.*~ Scootaloo: Hey girls, have you ever heard of SlenderMane? SweetieBelle: OH MY GOSH YES! LET'S NOT TALK ABOUT THAT PLEASE! AppleBloom: Yeah, i know it's an old pony tale, but i don't like to hear about at night... Scootaloo: Yeah you right. Sorry.
Seems good, in progress. But maybe instead of chatroom speak,maybe traditional quotes? Sure, it takes longer, but it allows the reader to picture the story in their head.Use proper grammar and adjectives,and BANG!You got an awesome story!
