Hey, guys. I don't really put much effort into promoting my own flagship story "The Quiet Place" because much of the earlier chapters are crappy when it comes to proper writing. However, I know many of you would love to have your stories in tip-top shape. I rarely get technical or in-depth with the critique I offer since I don't want to overwhelm anyone who's learning. (Trust me, my story has improved greatly over the course of months of learning.) Anyway, I thought I'd share this. Sapidus3 of FiMFiction.net and Ponychan.org was kind enough to break down one of my earlier chapters with some very in-depth (and amusing at times) critique. It might help you, it might not. He skipped my Prologue, but it doesn't matter since he's calling everything within just that chapter into question. https://docs.google.com/document/d/17KJkIgME3dSPP7J5d_N8BMCzZf8NOnYuIFY_lTLA_Xw/edit It is extremely long, but you can be selective in it. Again, this is critique of my first chapter (the one currently published) and I've read through it. It's also a catalyst for the revision I'm working on. This chapter has not been adapted to my current style and skill, so it's a perfect example to use for learning. I think comments are enabled, but I'd prefer you posted here if you had any thoughts since I don't want to clutter up the actual critique. Happy writing.
