Pony sonnet I wrote a year ago.

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  1. FlutterBetch

    FlutterBetch New In Town

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    Well we had to write a sonnet for school, and a shakespearean sonnet was the easiest. At the same time I started getting into MLP, so I wrote a sonnet after the first 2 episodes I saw.

    Constructive criticism is ok, and maybe I'll write more in the future if any one likes it.
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    Just started watching my little pony
    Started off with a pony named twilight
    Never thought that I could be a brony
    Twilight will soon have to save the sunlight

    She was sent on a quest to ponyville
    to supervise a sun celebration
    All the other ponies annoy her still
    All her new friends break her concentration


    Nightmare Moon returns to Equestria
    Permanent darkness is soon imminent
    The other ponies in hysteria
    The princess gone what a predicament

    The magic ponies defeat the evil
    This magical show makes me so gleeful
     
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    Rashall Master of the Veil Fire

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    Very nice, I would like to hear more for sure.
     
  3. Tempest Wind

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    I like it. The only thing I would change is "concentration" and "predicament" and find words with 3 syllables instead of 4.:smile:
     

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