[Summary]: Twilight lives a comfortable, expected life with the security of her mentors and friends. As she grows into a model unicorn a dangerous being takes hold of the potentially volatile Brood. After years of preparation for a higher order, Twilight is chosen to ascend beyond that of a typical magic user in a mysterious plan to counter the incoming war. During her dark task Twilight will discover a caged soul and unknowingly set them free, gradually acquiring an affinity for the darkness as a result. With betrayal, deceit, and manipulation storming around her, will she be able to contain herself and protect those she loves? Update: 6/17/2012 (omg so late) -- The 'new' chapters are on FiMFiction. I'll get around to reposting them here. At the moment, all of the 'old' chapters are here. Update: Chapter 22 added. 5/29/12 -- Scroll down to find it. Another Update: My fic is now on Fimfiction! You can find me (Aynine) or the story (The Quiet Place) there. Throw it a token view. STORY IS BEING UPDATED SLOWLY ON FIMFICTION. -->Huge update!<-- I have erased the dreaded wall-of-text posted versions and replaced them with the downloadable documents. The files should be no more than 80 kbs and it will retain all of its original formatting for ease of reading. Big thanks to Grey Nightmare for setting this up for all writers posting their work. Please leave your thoughts below. I'd love feedback in any form, or just tell me what you thought of each chapter (as I update). Feel free to send me any errors you find in sentences, typos, or continuity (even small things). I want to make this piece as polished as possible. The Quiet Place - [Adventure, Grimdark, Shipping] Prologue: View attachment 2325 Chapter 1: View attachment 1586 Chapter 2: View attachment 1587 Chapter 3: View attachment 1588 Chapter 4: View attachment 1589 Chapter 5: [See my next post down!] FiMFiction now has all of them imported from Google Docs, so the bold and italics are carried over. I still prefer the Google Docs for reading myself, though.
Wow. This is very well written! It really leaves you hanging at the end too! I found it very enjoyable and hope that it isn't the last from you. (If it is then you're being a sadist!) The only problem I saw was a typo in the second section, fourth segment from the bottom. The word "have" was omitted.
This post will contain chapters 5-9 (when they're edited and ready to be posted, of course). For the Prologue and chapters 1-4, see the first post. Chapter 5: View attachment 1590 -- 9/10/11 Chapter 6: View attachment 1591 -- 9/13/11 Chapter 7: View attachment 1592 -- 9/18/11 Chapter 8: View attachment 1593 -- 9/28/11 Chapter 9: View attachment 1594 -- 10/6/11 Please send me any errors you find. Typos, sentences, word usage, or continuity within the story (pertaining to itself). Even with my own proofreading passes (and additions), I still miss or create new ones. Thanks!
Could you put these in Google Documents or something, because I'm having trouble opening the files on my computer!!! It is NOT what one would call a fast computer!!
This post should contain chapters 10 through the Epilogue, though that is subject to change on whether or not I split the story into two separate fics or keep it as one long piece. Chapter 10: View attachment 1595 -- 10/24/11 Chapter 11: View attachment 1626 -- 11/02/11 Chapter 12: View attachment 1777 -- 11/13/11 Chapter 13: View attachment 1942 -- 11/28/11 Chapter 14: View attachment 2151 -- 12/20/11 Chapter 15 added below!
This post is being recycled for the next 5 chapters. Chapter 15: View attachment 2324 -- 12/30/2011 Chapter 16: View attachment 2366 -- 1/7/2012 Chapter 17: View attachment 2575 -- 1/16/2012 Chapter 18: View attachment 2589 -- 1/23/2012 Chapter 19: View attachment 2808 -- 2/1/2012 Chapter 19 is up!
I might have to force myself into reading this soon, I've yet to read a FiM fan-fiction (for shame!) but this looks like it could be interesting.. You've sure kept at it long enough for me to know it's no lousy knockoff
I'm happy to say it's still floating at 4 stars on FiMFiction.net. I would like to get around to rewriting the earlier chapters. I feel I left some with bad purple prose, but subsequent revisions included better character development (which was lacking). I'm currently writing a flashback chapter (which is mentioned a few times in passing) and shuffling ideas for the next. Not sure what your tastes are, but the tags (in order of emphasis) are Adventure > Grimdark > Romance. -------------------------------------- This post is being recycled for the next set of chapters. Chapter 20: View attachment 3028 -- 2/10/12 Chapter 21: View attachment 3297 -- 2/25/12 Chapter 22: (Attachment at the bottom of this post) - 5/29/12 Chapter 22 is up!
