Who am I??

Discussion in 'Literature' started by smittyquill, Mar 30, 2013.

  1. smittyquill

    smittyquill New In Town

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    Here's a poem i just wrote, I hope you enjoy it. As always feedback is welcome.



    We the people in this peculiar state
    Will face the question as we wake
    We'll feel its devastating quake
    And live in the stir it will make

    "Who am I?"

    We beat the drums and tune the bell
    Hoping the beat will tell
    We dance to the music and pester the swell
    Til it dies we will dwell

    "Who am I?"

    A lesson I've learned and wish to share.
    So give your head a minute, if you dare
    Look back at your past and what you've done
    And trace it to now like a rerun

    "Who am I?"

    Reflect on it for just a little bit
    And start where we you've begun
    Do as I say and the answer will emit
    Because who you are, is what you've done.

     
  2. Parsons206

    Parsons206 respiras, amicus
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    It's pretty good but the 'And start where we you've begun' we you've confused me
     

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