The Light Never Goes Out

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  1. BrianBlessedPony

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    #1 BrianBlessedPony, Jul 6, 2011
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    yea, your talent come out again, Gilson, its god
     
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    That was an incredible fan fiction. I was surprised at the amount of emotional depth could be added to the characters in a few short pages.
     
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    Thank you both!
    Is there anything that could do with some adjustments? Gramar/spelling wise?
     
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    didn't notice any, just unsure on the idea, but it works so not complaining
     
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    Need me to explain antyhing about the idea? ^^;
     
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    its not a road i would go down, thats all i'm sayin,
     
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    Not a road I like either. But when I get an idea, I go with the flow. This was my own, defense, against what I call "Last Pony/Mare Standing" stories. The final character of the mane 6 (usually Twilight) thinks back. Usually, when its Twi, she's immortal. I hated that idea, the lonliness. So, my defense popped up.
    Plus, it allows me to try sadness.
    Funniest thing is, for a one off tale, I got side stories planned. A few one off's and a larger arc involving an OC :) When life gives you lemons, go and demand oranges.
     
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    when live gives you lemons, make Ale and make life go WTF?!
     
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    "When life gives you lemons, don't make lemonade. Make life take the lemons back! Get mad! I don't want your damn lemons, what am I supposed to do with these? Demand to see life's manager! Make life rue the day it thought it could give Cave Johnson lemons! Do you know who I am? I'm the man who's gonna burn your house down! With the lemons! I'm gonna get my engineers to invent a combustible lemon that burns your house down!"

    That's the first thing I thought when I read your post!
     
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    I WILL read this! Soon! Bear with me :p
     
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    There's a bear with you?! SHIIIIIIIIIOOOT MAH MONKEY!
    And its okay man, just do it soon.

    And Tenortrouble, I had just scene that, but decided to keep to my own personal quote ;)
    Stainless, see my above comment :p
     
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    I'd just like to say that the story has been adjusted as per suggestions from a pre-reader for ED:
    Some updated lines
    Bit more clarity on Rarity's memory
    An actual ending to try and fit with the build up I put in.

    Please respond. I know some already have on the radio chat, but every little helps!
     
    #13 BrianBlessedPony, Jul 9, 2011
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