Fighting Blaze: The Pony That Fell From the Sky (WIP)

Discussion in 'Development Diaries' started by FightingPony77, Oct 18, 2012.

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  1. FightingPony77

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    I work at bakery, sound familiar? =3
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    North America I'll give you that much.
    (View Discretion is advised!, this is shown of one single swear, the B-A word, and yes I am changing it, but from dramatic sense it should stay, but for censorship I will block out all the letters except the letter b, if this is still a violation, please notify me.)

    Its begins in a simple small town
    He was alone
    no one to call his friend
    he saw a light coming from his closet door
    he blacked out as soon as he opened it
    when he woke up he was in a bed he didn't know
    there was a girl, with red hair looking over him
    she was beautiful
    her eyes were soft and kind
    Her name was star
    He asked where he was, she said he was safe
    As he got up he looked around, he didn't know where he was, it turned out to be the distant future, but why was he brought here, she said that he was the last of the pure, the last before the gene splicing started
    After a few days of teaching him about this new world, she brought him into her work place, her boss was angry at her, bringing in a uninvited guest, but when he saw him, he stopped, his eyes lit up in joy
    He was a pure bred, a human with no altered DNA
    He offered him a deal, he would let him stay if he volunteered for an experiment that would change his life forever
    He would be given a process
    They began to train his body, so he could use the watch, a watch that would give him power beyond what he could understand
    His DNA was pure enough, but his body was full of needless bacteria.
    He was then prepped, his body and his mind needed to become purer and stronger, or the device would destroy him, no normal person could simply put it on, and after several months, he was ready, the watch stood on a shining metal table, waiting for him
    On picking it up, it felt heavier than he thought it would, it was cold to the touch, it was stainless steel, with a memorizing blue inclined face
    silver notches for the numbers, it looked like a normal watch to him, almost too normal, star was standing behind him and in a soft gentle voice she said "Just put it on, you'll see." she added a small hint of sass, it made me blush a little as I slowly put it on my left wrist, I felt a cold shiver go down my back, then it latched itself into place, almost tight, but just the perfect fit.
    Fighting Blaze: then a sharp prick broke my concentration on the watch as I felt a small cool liquid go into me, they were the nanites that would be regulating my body for the final prep before I could use the watches full feature, she said it would be one more day before I could use it fully, the day seemed like years to me in anticipation
    Then the day finally came, I was a bit on edge, not sure what would happen, and to make things worse there was a chance it might damage my spine on the warm up phase, but it was worth the risk, who wouldn't want to be a superhero, well they said I would only use them as tools but heck still worth it, all my training I just hope I live
    I was led into the observatory’s main stage, there was a large crowd on the other side of the glass waiting to see this new technological marvel be unveiled, they forgot to mention there would be a crowd but that didn't matter as Star told me to raise my arm above my head, as she instructed me to say..."Power Up." This seemed a bit cheesy to me, but heck it beats saying, its morphing time...
    Then it happened...
    The lights went out, I was taken off guard as one by one the crowd began to scream in terror, I couldn't see anything, then the emergency lights came on, the room filled with crimson red as a dark figure was amongst the crowd, I couldn't make it out, only he had a similar watch on, but the face was glowing an orange red,then the next thing I knew he blasted a hole through the thick glass just by raising his hand, making me fly back and almost making me pass out, barely able to see, the dark figure looked to Star who was cowering in the corner, he knocked her out as he walked to a control panel, he flipped some switches as the machine behind me whirred to life as in a violent blast of thunderous blue light a vortex ripped into existence, he then walked over to me as I shouted, "You b******!" he then pulled me up by my collar, and whispered in my ear, "Die..." He then threw me into the vortex with monstrous strength , the last I heard was screaming of the crowd as I said in a weak voice "Power...up..."
     
    #1 FightingPony77, Oct 18, 2012
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