What happens when Lauren Faust is teleported to Equestria? I just published this fic, I'd really appreciate some feedback and opinions! http://www.fimfiction.net/story/19282/Journey-to-my-Imagination Work in progress!
I skimmed some of it. You have grammatical errors and some places where you could stand to drop or gain punctuation (eg: run-on sentences). I'm too tired to look at much, though.
