Origins of Cyberhoof (first draft)

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  1. Cyberhoof

    Cyberhoof New In Town

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    Okay, I've been working on this for the past few days. I don't in any way consider myself a writer. It's just a project I started for fun when it was suggested to me to tell the story of my OC pony Cyberhoof. Please, any constructive criticism is much apreciated. Any "You suck" "Lame" "LoL" and such comments will be ignored.



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    #1 Cyberhoof, Aug 4, 2011
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  2. Apple Core

    Apple Core Practically Part of the Site Itself

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    I loved the story! I loved it even more when you had Angel make the cyber pony so she could be with him to help him, I thought that was really sweet.

    It was a great story, you should write more, maybe even do a drawing of Angel. I'd really like to see one.
     
    #2 Apple Core, Aug 10, 2011
  3. Luprony

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    You NEED to submit that to the fanfic section. Seriously. It was awesome.
     
    #3 Luprony, Aug 10, 2011
  4. Zephyr Wind

    Zephyr Wind FWOOOSHH

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    Submit to the fan fic section please, we need something like that in there!
     
    #4 Zephyr Wind, Aug 10, 2011
  5. Cyberhoof

    Cyberhoof New In Town

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    Wow thank you all for the words of encouragement. It needs some work before i can submit it to the regular fic section. I have to split it up into chapters, fix some structure errors. that kind of thing.
     
    #5 Cyberhoof, Aug 10, 2011
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