I'm in the course of writing the ending for Lev and the Silent Soldier, and I'm not sure who should die yet. IF YOU DON'T WANT THE PLOT SPOILED DON'T READ FURTHER So far, Derpy has assembled a team of deserters to help her find Lev Rainbow Dash has thoughts Lev likes Rainbow Dash Reader becomes more attached to Fluttershy Derpy knows Baker, and he is really good, so that means... Equestria is under false rule! (?- don't know who really yet) and Durwood kill Celestia and turn it into dictatorship and slay innocent ponies Lev returns to Equestria Final epic battle for the throne Then who should die? Lev doesn't in the end. I need ideas. If you missed something or want more detail PM me.
http://www.everypony.com/forums/showthread.php?2566-Writing-Tips Okay... my suggestion would be to rewrite the whole thing. Honestly, why can't anyone around here base a fic on the sort of thing that happens in the show? What part of "Friendship is magic" do people not get? like I said in my writing tips, you should never add in your own characters if you can help it and if you do work them in gradually. You're stuck because you're trying to write a fic based on characters in a specific show, but then you added your own characters who you have to make things up about and who have gone WAY outside what would actually happen in the series. Things which you know don't add up. Like I always say to fan fiction writers, never have your characters ACT on their own. Always react to something else. Look, just picture a few of the mane cast in your head. Now use the phrase "Killing innocent ponies" to describe this fic to them. How would they respond, in the following order Twilight Spike Rarity Applejack Pinkie Rainbow Fluttershy Celestia Luna Discord Cutie Mark Crusaders Big Macintosh Derpy
