Analytical Talon't Thread

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  1. CobaltBreeze

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    Hi this where i will post my latest reviews

     
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    Duuuuuude. This is so static. It's just your OC on screen and a blank wall behind them. It doesn't even tie into the opening joke that I didn't even get because I couldn't hear it.

    But, as a review, it's not bad. You give the pros and the cons but you also run through the story for the majority of the video rather than make the pros and cons the focus. Most reviewers get the story out the way immediately, only bringing up what's necessary to make points. I like that you're trying to bridge a gap between the book these tropes are relating back too, trying to educate on how old this plotline is but never making it amount to anything. Is it funny you noticed this or annoying?

    Not bad but plenty to be done to improve.
     

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